Question: How can I make this flow?

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Answer #1:

you need an opening sentence
one that really expresses your feelings about space
"After this, going into space has begun happening more and more. " that just doesnt sound right

Answer #2:

On July 20, 1960, the Apollo 11 was the first spaceship to land on the moon. It was the fifth flight of project Apollo. Neil Armstrong and Buzz Aldrin were the first humans to take that step on the moon. “That's one small step for man, one giant leap for mankind,” Neil Armstrong had famously said. After this, entering space has begun to happen more often. All this happened because John F. Kennedy made it a goal to enter space by the end of the 1960s.

You might want to mention the first guy to actually enter space?

Answer #3:

I'll reorganize your paragraph and fix a few mistakes as I do so, let me know if you like it. :P

“That's one small step for man, one giant leap for mankind,” is a famous quote said by Neil Armstrong on July 20, 1960. It was the fifth flight of project Apollo, Apollo 11, that was the first spaceship to land on the moon, and Neil Armstrong and Buzz Aldrin were the first humans to step upon the moon's surface. All this happened because John F. Kennedy made a goal to go into space by the end of the 1960’s. After this moon landing, going into space began happening more and more.

Answer #4:

In a proposal set by the Kennedy administration, man was to go into space by the end of the decade. On July, 20, 1960, the fifth series of its kind, the Apollo 11, carrying Neil Armstrong and Buzz Aldrin, was the first mission to have its participants set foot on sub-orbital soil. Millions watched as Neil Armstrong quoted, " That's one small...........for mankind" thus, marking the new era of space exploration.

Answer #5:

*flexes typing fingers* let's give it a go then:

Apollo11, the fifth flight of project Apollo, made the first moon landing on July 20th, 1960. The project were manned by Neil Armstrong and Buzz Aldrin. The famous quote, "That's one small step for man, one giant leap for mankind" was uttered by Armstrong as he made the first step onto the moon's surface. Ever since, space travel has become more and more common, all thanks to John F. Kennedy' goal of going to space by the end of the 1960s.





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